@neilly:

i totally 100% agree w/ neilly
um to be blunt this was just...awful.
the storyline is terrible and moves to fast
what the frick is up with them?!
they meet and like 5 minutes later they are in love with each other?
um NO.
just NO.
and you can so tell that page 43 especially was not drawn by you.
your art is totally different than that
and your character isn't pretty either
shes average and has her moments where she is actually quite ugly
and why would everyone be in love with her and keep telling her how pretty she is
and when people do that you say thank you, not just ignore them
you make her seem like a snot nosed bitch who gets whatever she wants
this whole thing was just not a good idea to post
try writing a better storyline, coming up with a better character, and try to improve your art skills more and make a better comic

omg all the characters are way off hagi only has eyes for saya
saya does not act like that she's a sweet loving person and kai does not act like a pervert anyways your character is not that pretty your proportions are way off and hagi will never go with your character this story is not good sorry you've been rejected lol sorry had to tell the truth couldn't stand it

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U jus hav 2 read! And yes, I did drawed the last 5 pags - i worked hard!

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Then shut up.

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U riteing this?

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thx! it dose take effert to drawed all this pags!! keep reding - i hav lots of grate stuff 2 come!!

lol I like it it's cute

@ScreaminMonkey:

Ummm OK?

@PheonixFox:

thx!! i no, i'm trrble at proportion! i wz just so exsited to rite this tat i didn't want to wait!