Hello, Hello!

To all of you who view this. Which is surprisinly a large number(and keeps growing). This is an exerpt from a role play me and kamichama karin s have been working on. Sadly we have not been making any progress or working on it for that matter and I don't know when we will. But Fear Not!! If you enjoyed this snippit of the story and wish for more I am going to start regularly posting this story from the begining.
You see, below is the last few paragraphs of a story that took a decent chunk out of a notebook. And I have decided to post all of it online in the hopes that someone somewhere enjoys it! If you have any comments, questions, sugestions, errors you find, or feedback of any kind PLEASE tell me about it. I'd love to hear from you. Anything you say is welcome, just please keep it polite. Leave a comment or message me, Thank you!

SERIOUSLY, Please tell me your opinon if you read any of this! I want to know! :)

~Kitty

P.S. The begining of this story will be posted under my World labled "Role Play, The Begining!" Once again, Thank you and I hope you check it out!

Good bye~

Through the Sands of Time

leeaif- the air was cold and the wind was twisting through leeaif's ginger hair. he stood up defiantly, and looked into the horizon. as he adjusted his eyes to the dimmed autum light, he noticed a small child running away from the village's outskirts. she ran like hell; apparently trying to get away from the man chasing her. Leeaif frantically tried to make sense of what was going on, he watched in horror as the rough looking man caught up to the little girl. her large brown eyes shone with fright as the man caught her by the back of her dress. Leeaif felt his anger rise as the man lifted a glowing hand "a magician..." leeaif grumbled with an intimidating look on his face. he jumped off of the cliff he was standing on with poise, and shot into the air like a pheonex. he transmuted a sword, and landed in between the man and the innocent girl. he growled; and slashed at the man with the newly transmutd sword. he shielded the little girl from the oncoming blood with his arms.
she smiled up at him, and giggled a bit. "what is going on?" leeaif asked with a concerned tone.the girl 's smile turned down, and she started talking quickly. she spoke of a leigon of magicians that barged into the town, and started destroying everything. they set buildings on fire, and they spoiled all the food they had gathered and grown with magic. she started crying. Leeaif hugged her, and looked toward the enterance to the village.

Leeaif slowly began to regain concousness, he found himself in front of Hiboshi's, staring in a window in the rain. a crash of thunder clapped, and the lightning allowed him to see inside the house. he was still brainwashed, but leeaif's mind was compleatly normal. he tried to stop himself from knocking on the door; but his body slowly rapped on the large oak door.
"oh god, Tomoe, Maora, please don't open the door! I don't want to hurt you!" Leeaif had figured everything out. and he didn't want to do it! He knocked on the door once more "oh pese dont open that door!" he started crying, eventhough his face was solom an devoted of emotion. just then the door began to open slowly.

Brainwash

HEIDIIII!!!!!!!! I A SO SORRY IT TOOK ME SO LONG TO RESPOND!! T^T please forgive me (puuuu)
like I said before, i have been super busy, and I haven't had much time to respond thanks to my challenge (pay t forward)
anyway, i have compiled a response! hahahaha!
also,could you type up the character profile/descriptions
i want to draw everyone together, so I would love to have the desctriptions! <3 thank youuuu!

Leeaif—
Leeaif struggled to his feet after being tossed down by the power of the overwhelming poison that was brainwashing him. His eyes were glowing; a mysterious dark crimson color. Leeaif didn’t know what was happening to his body. It felt as though he was being controlled by invisible wires; and he was unable to move on his own. His puppet-like body trekked across the dusty ground, past the arc of old warped oak, and into the barren field that once was home to a large assortment of flowers. He trudged forward, hunched and panting. “mh-what is happening!!” soon Leeaif couldn’t resist, and his mind succumbed to the brainwash also.
Back inside the dusty building, Noah clung tightly to Collins. “are you sure we are doing the right thing?” she asked, trembling. Collins looked at her with a smile. “of course we are, sister. That monster deserves whatever comes to her. And that alchemist is the best form of torture for a freak like her. “ Collins smile faded, and he stared ahead in the barren field. “those magicians ruin everything.”
The field he was staring at so intensely once was a vast garden. He imagined his little sister Noah, tending to a small purple flower that was wilting away to a grey nub. She smiled as she tended to it, and watched it slowly spring back to life. Her mother was standing over her, and was using magic to return the life to it.
Collins’ mind broke back to reality. “that bitch is going to get what she deserves.”

End