Good composition to your manga! Hope to see more. But next time can you not draw it on lined paper!

I agree with Osoraku about the text, but the art work is great. Just a shame it's on lined paper.

�mmm, yeap! Text by PC would be nice; since you take care so much on details� each panel has something, but a like the last two of them, ...mostly! Pretty well done!!! O.O Next!