The Intro.(Please tell me what u think)

Abby is given an assignment to retrieve a ring from a secured building.Dan(her friend who is foundation K's best hacker)I can only disable the alarm.Abby:Good.that keeps the challenge.She went into the building,got past the motion detectors,heat sensors,etcetera.Abby:Amatuers...When she got the ring ,she tripped the alarm on purpose just so she can say,"Hey losers!If your building is so "secure" why do I have your ring?!",and run DOWN the wall of the building.And she did exactly that and at the last 20 feet,something retracted,she landed and heard Dan say,"Good show!". END OF INTRO

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