here is opne of my sample stories please give me help with tips and advice.

A young vivacious dark brown curly hair beuty fell in love. this was the beging of the end she met a young gentlman suiter and fell madly in love with him. they fell more and more in love every second of the day. he gave her a single white rose and said it would live like there love forever, this of course was not true. Her lover was so in love he asked for her hand and all she said was yess. They were married and overwhelmingly happy, for now. He was taken gravly ill one day and did not live to see the next morning.She was struck. she was heartbroked and dead inside,but she kept that one single rose for weeks to come.Till one dusk she didnt wake up she had been stabed to death by her husbands ex wife.her life was ended desprate to be with her love agian,but she could'nt. her soul was doomed to walk the earth forever. that next year a women is often seen siiting staring at his grave holding a single blood red rose. look twice and she is gone, is it her? morning her loss? we may never knowtill this day red roses are symbols of lasting love because she never gave on her husband far after life.....
by:missy halland

this is one that he liks very much please comment! (sorry for the typoes!)

~f@llen