World's name: AM I A HEARTLESS
Creator: jctmanofsteel
Date created: 10/29/09
Type/category: Life / Kingdom Hearts
Members /guest poster so far: n/a
Description (as by the creator): "can you brek a heartless heart"?
Review by Support KIRA:
Presentation: Alright, I ALWAYS start with the presentation and design of a world. From what I can see, the background picture seems to suit the title and is fairly uniform to the color of the world design and text. I approve. Everything is easily seen and read, that’s great. There is no introduction. You may want to include something about what they world is for, or about, but from the posts, I can tell it’s just basically a place for uh…poems about life? Poems isn’t really the right word though, the posts remind me of the type of things you see after hours in coffee shops, the stand up type of real life material you see. ^^ So, you probably have no need for an intro, but it might look nice to include one anyway just so visitors know WHAT they are getting into. : )
Content: As I stated, it’s a world with sadder-themed works like poetry. I’m not sure if you are aiming for it to be a long one lined rant, but there is no punctuation, and some spelling errors. It’s not illegible or anything, that’s why I’m not sure if it’s supposed to be this way. ^^;
Overall Opinion: It’s interesting to check out the posts and read Jct’s opinions of the world. Not everything is happy, and since I can be a pretty gothic-theme loving person myself, I actually really like some of it. ^^ It’s refreshing to see things from the dark side, as I like to say. XD You should check it out if you’re into stand up poetry corner, or just seeing things from a different perspective.
Rating: I’ll give it a 3.8. My suggestion is to be a bit more active, or even invite some other posters who share your feelings and would like to write this way too. It may bring people together to where you can all share your outlook on life. ^^
Review by ShingetsuHime:
I think it’s very good. I love the entries it contains. They really speak to me since I can really relate. For improvement recommendations…maybe add some punctuation. All of your posts are all one big run-on. Another is maybe proof read. I found a lot of mistakes going over them but they were easily fixable, like a single missed letter in simple words that your finger didn’t press, we all make them. I would definitely suggest people read this. Everything is really well written and all have meaning. My rating: 4.7! Awesome job!
Review by beloved blood:
The bg goes well with teh title of the world, o' course. Very deep emotional ... explanations? The only thing I think the world needs is more punctuation, for the sake of grammar. Just where the sentences end and begins- it's kind of confusing. Oh, perhaps some pictures- *o* I am one for visual!
4 stars!
Overall stars: 4.2 out of 5 (excellent!)
What we say: unique posts, very interesting indeed! go check it out!
Link to the world: click HERE
