Song idea

Pretty much i had an idea of this song and well I want you guys to see it and bounce any ideas anyways.here it is below.
Eternal nightmare original composition

*instrumental*
*chorus*
welcome to your nightmare as you will see.
It is eternal and you will never leave.
Everything you have learned will only beeeeeee.
Burned in an eternal flame as you breath.
*instrumental reversed of the first*
Welcome to my eternal nightmare.
Watch and you will see.
No one can escape from here.
As you try to wake you only end up even deeper.
Into the eternal sleep now.
Watch as you can feel.
Your breath slowly dripping into sand.
Drowning deeper into the darkness........
Endless...
*end chorus*
*instrumental form the into*
*repeat lyrics from the chorus*
*instrumental*
welcome to our eternal nightmare.
Where nothing is what is seems.
Everything will only get darker.
With nothing to see.
Watch as all your dreams and all things you hold dear.
Burn in an eternal fire for all to see.
Now embrace the nightmare.
(there's no use struggling)
Close your eyes now.
(as you will see)
Nothing is ever as it.......
seeems as you......
dream.
*cue reversed instrumental*
Instruments violin,piano,organ,guitar,harp,synthesizer,drums,and chello

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