okay this is just a one page thing i just wrote and i thaught id post it. tell me what you think please.

I stood up, only to be brought back down again abruptly. I felt so much pain. I bent my head down my hair falling like a dark waterfall over me. I breathed hard searching for an answer. ''Where is tis pain coming from?'' I slowly sat back against the wall, my head a confused puzzle. Looking for questions and answers. I was tuned out by the deafaning pound of my heart in my ears. I felt it, my blood seeping under my skin. The pain was all over...I couldn't find an answer. Search! My brain commanded. Search!! It seemed to shout over and over. Until one sound louder than anything seemed to repeat its same tone in my head. doki.doki.doki. Repeated the same drowned monotone. It got louder and louder. DOKI! DOKI! DOKI!''HEART!'' I screamed out as if I could stop the sound right in its tracks. What's going on? I wondered. I pondered the question in my head. Back and forth. Back and forth. What's the source? The true source of this pain I'm feeling. Then I heard it Cloud's scream. Loud and clear...I knew what happened next. I was afraid of it...My worst nightmare was alive....and it was happening right in front of my eyes.

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