Writing

Hey *waves*
we now have really slow internet
and
I am going to apply for a creative writing course. On the application form, it says 'Use the following line in a short descriptive peive of creative writing:
'Soup, toast, loneliness and the colour blue.'
weird huh?
well I came up with something and I would like some feedback

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I walked out of my rather small bedroom, navigating my way through the house to the kitchen. I hated this house. It was so small and cramped. And blue. Most of the walls were blue. Nobody was in the house. All that was on the bench was a bowl of soup, a little stack of toast and a note saying they would be back soon. 'They' was my family. My mum and my annoying little brother. Dad died when I was 11. I looked around the tiny space of a kitchen. Soup, toast, loneliness and the colour blue. That was all saw. Angrily, I grabbed a spoon and tasted the soup. It was cold.

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What'cha think?

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