Rain drops fell, as if the Angels are crying.
Toma laid on the ground, motionless. Her face was full of rage and fear.
Aizen stood over her, smirking. “You should really just die,” he said coldly, “You have been abandoned and left to rot.”
He bent down. “Your friends are dead. They died attacking Hueco Mundo to save Suchi-Ru. You sacrificed yourself for Raidon, only to be now dieing on the ground.” He smiled evilly.
Toma remained silent, clutching the feather Raidon had given her. Tears fell down her cheeks.
Aizen stood up. He lifted his foot, He put it on her wound and stepped.
There was a crunch. Toma screamed. Blood spouted out if her mouth.
Aizen looked up to the sky. “Ah,” he sighed, “the sound of screaming. Excellent.”
Toma glared at him. “D... damn you... Aizen,” she spat out.
Aizen pushed a little more. Toma screamed.

Suddenly, two swords swung at him. Aizen side stepped, avoiding the blows. A pink kimono flashed back.
Shunsui clicked his tongue. “Too bad,” he said, “It would have been easier if you didn't duck.”
Aizen grimaced. “Such harsh words,” he tsked. A smile crept onto his face. He disappeared.
Ukitake, Unohana, and Renji appeared.
“What did we miss,” Ukitake asked. The two had been stopped by Ukitake's coughing fit.
“Aizen,” Shunsui stated.
Ukitake nodded. He looked over at Toma.

Toma gazed up at the sky. Pain racked her body. The rain blurred her eye sight. But she still felt the tears fall down.
“Rai,” she muttered, “I'll find you.”
Every thing went black.

Unohana knelt down next to Toma.
“How does she look?” Ukitake asked, worried.
“Byakuya would have our skins if she got killed,” Shunsui added.
Unohana grimaced. “I need to get her to the infirmary,” she said, “Other wise she'll die of blood loss.”
“I'll carry her,” Shunsui said.
“No,” Renji said, “I will.”
Unohana nodded. Renji picked up Toma bridal style.
“Rai,” She muttered.
Renji shook his head.
The two shun poed away.

I hope this is a little better writing style.