you finally typed the text ^o^
now it's easier to be read great job!!

@TheAngelRaine:

thnx for the tip!

I really like you story so far^^ But it can be really hard to read at times, even if you dont have any special program to add bubbles in there is a simple solution and its called ms paintXD

ha~i~~
i think it's better now ^^
and btw your coloring is great!

hmm..

i think your writing isn't bold enough. it can be seen, but better if it's more bold ^^
the expressions are great! you can see what the character feels through his/her face

over all i like it!
keep it up!

@Mi Chi E:

Sorry about that, the scanner hates me and i'll try a better way to make it visual when I don't have the digital art system

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Thx girl, and it will be more shocking when I make more and kept the story going further

Cute~ You did nice on the shadings. ^^ Keep practicing on different poses and perspectives, ok? Gambatte!

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Go tell your fma fan friends

@EmoVampireRiska:

If you have friends who loves fma, tell them and show it

FMA WOOOO!!!!!
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