hey you know thats not bad. theres good line quality in there to show that you could have good potential when it comes to art. If i were to critique, it wouldnt really be about your talent, just about your composition and layout of the drawing. I think it would look nicer without any writing like 'Red XIII and Naniki' cos it makes it look unprofessional. I think a bit of colour (probably a colour pencil or watercolour) could bring itout more, cos you have got talent. O n the whole, i liked it, well done. ;)