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    wonderkid

    Otaku Legend | Posted 04/26/06 | Reply

    Please do another page the suspense is killing me (shaking with excitement!!!)I really hope you do more of these because there really cool. CUA!

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    RedTigress

    Otaku Legend | Posted 04/25/06 | Reply

    I like it, though i agree with Reikimaru about the sound affects thing. I also like where it starts, cannot wait to see more! ~Red

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    Kokkoii-Matoku

    Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/25/06 | Reply

    It's still cool ^-^ nah she shouldn't color it if it's a comicy it shouldn't be i can't wait till number three and up nyah! keep up the good work.

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    PHANTOMBLITZ

    Otaku Legend | Posted 04/25/06 | Reply

    weird on this one but better before?oh well good job

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    XxRhokotsuxX

    Senior Otaku | Posted 04/24/06 | Reply

    Um... Yet another tip. You should put more time into the art. This seems rushed, just like the first page. On the next one, take a little more time on the art and characters and everything. :D That would make it great. �☼�Rhokotsu�☼�

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    Reikimaru

    Senior Otaku | Posted 04/24/06 | Reply

    Some comic advise, try using the sound of what the characters are doing rather than just putting the verb. With the verb it looks tacky. For example, when Esmeralda tosses the wrapping, think of how that would sound and put something like "fwip" rather than "toss." Other than that, this is good. You should color it.