I think this looks really good!! Her pose is very nice, and it looks original. However, her porportions seem just a little off. Don't wory though, keep practicing and you'll continue to improve!!

Tis good but personaly i like split line mouths better than one full line. But its better than my attemt( ughh how do you spell that!) at her snice my style of drawing is so different. ^^; ~Mizu-chan