I agree. Why did she become a state alchemist, how? How does she know Ed, why would Ed like her? I also agree the hair needs to be changed. its well drawn though, unfortunately the character will cause people to give you a bad rating even if you're an amazing artist. One constructive criticism on the drawing of your character is something that people often do, she's leaning to the side a bit, I know the page is tilted a bit but still it looks a little leaned. Good drawing skills though!

Mary Sue much? The hair style is just like Ed's. And her only goals are to win Ed's love. If you develop her more (giving her a decent history and profile), you could get a great character. You have the potential to do it.