I would like to hear the story that you are trying to make... As for the drawing, I'M NOT TRYING TO PUT YOU DOWN but it's not by always hearing good things from people that you will progress so here it is: The pose is awfully curved,it seems like she's about to fall or the her legs broke. after this, your snowflakes are extremely...clich�, snow flakes doesn't HAVE to look like flakes in anime, when they are not from a close view flake are simply little white dots on the screen, it actually makes things more realistic that way. on the hand tht is holding the fan, a finger is missing, this is really important to not miss such details even though it doesn't seem that important. it seems like you got lazy when you wanted to draw the fan and butched it. just try to make it more shaped next time. the Tibias are way too short, the Knees should at least be a good centimeter up. the neck is far too small and a tad bit too tall. as for the other arm, I am able to catch it's position but the arm isn't in the right one, the upper part of the arm should be at an angle of 20 degrees. and sorry for my lack of expression, my primarylanguage isn't english