umm lose the lined paper use color umm it looks like just a quick sketch eyes are cool mouth is weird and yes, the neck IS long sorry if im kinda negative but i think these things are true

^^ ooh its sooo kawaii!! hehehe I'll give ya some tips if you don't mind...hehe..the only thing I think needs altering is the neck..kinda long...hahaha no no no don't mind me!! I suck at drawing so you shouldn't listen to me...haha well JA sakura! ^^

Congrats on your first submission. I really like the eyes.

Nice! The neck is a little long but it's a nice pic!