You mean. Character? Here are some tips. You don't wanna draw on lined paper. Why? I mean you can but it messes up the quilty of the picture itself. If you don't have computer paper, its easy to buy. ^^ You colored, some parts right, but some parts, wrong. ^-^ I like how you colored her hair, thats something good. and her eyes. The scratches on, her face. kinda ruins it. Look at some how to draw manga turiols to help you and you should get better. She sounds like a very cute charater for your manga. Just, Turiools will help you in a long shot. so check some out. Her neck is to skinny though, make it thicker, or else, if she leaned over, her neck would snap.. Kokkoii-Matokus number one rule: Never Give Up Live it, Learn it, Love it ^^