Okay thank you. I'll try to work abit on that. I might re-do this one now that I think about it. Take into concideration what you've said. Thanks alot!
^^
Since you're asking about the neck, I think the thickness is fine, especially since this is drawn in the style of manga (you could even make it thinner if you wanted to). Now, for the length, it's slightly long, but that's really all right too. The only thing I would suggest is try making the lines connecting her neck to her shoulders straighter and less of a gradual curve.
Im glad that you are proud of your work :)
you did a really great job on the anatomy and the sketch is really neat. i could never pull that off! keep it up!
<3
Oh my oh my! That wassn't very long at all! Really it was just long enough to gather information from but without getting to sleepy. I swear.
Anyway- THanks for some advice about the hands. I need to work on them. But as a quick question (because I'm not sure this is right or not now that I look at it) Do you think the neck is a little long? Just wondering because it looks to long and to skinny.
Thank you for your help. It was very uh- helpful? I think you should stay on with your critiques. This one was fun to read. XP
NOT THE COMPANY ;D (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
This looks very good! I like the pose and the hands look very nice~
I like what you're doing with the right hand, but at the same time, it doesn't look very natural. adding a hint of the thumb may help. :D
also the chin is a little too far to the right. Try centering it a bit more so it lines up with the rest of the face.
But overall, I think it looks wonderful! Adding a little more detail here and there will make it look even better. ^^ Like a little design on her apron or dress.
Hello! I'm monochromexii~ I thought I'd help as well. I apologize beforehand for my ridiculously long critique...
You say you're not worried about the face, and I can see why- It's quite well done! The pose is too. This is a very pleasing and likable piece in general. (on a side note, I like the title too XD).There are only a few technical details here and there.
She's wearing a kimono underneath her apron, yes? disregard this if she is not ;_;
(a really unnecessary note, and very petty on my part, but good job on folding it left over right. Right over left is used for the dead).
Assuming it's a kimono, the sleeves should be larger, and as they are rolled up, the folds should be more plentiful and defined.
also, seeing as she is facing directly to the viewer, the kerchief on her head should arc evenly over her head and not be falling to her left. That would be more for a 3/4 view.
For her apron, I can see that she is bending towards her right, so you should draw more folds coming out of her right waist. You've got a start on the one that you've already drawn.
Now, you did her hands very well, albeit a little small. Also, the thumb on her left hand should be a bit shorter. Her palms need to be about as long as her index finger.
~~~
phew, okay, sorry about that! I know it's a lot of reading, but I hope I helped you a bit ._.
Saw you wanted some critique. Im Zero-chan, one of the mods from Critiquers United.
First, the pose is still one I have trouble with, and you did a great job!
her hands are really good, though a little bit off, try practicing hands.
I do think the shoulder closest to you is too far forward, just move it to the side and up a bit and it would look perfect.
Her face is really proportionate, which I applaud you for, I do think she needs a nose though.
kisskiss-bangbang
Otaku Eternal | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
@monochromexii:
Okay thank you. I'll try to work abit on that. I might re-do this one now that I think about it. Take into concideration what you've said. Thanks alot!
^^
matt
monochromexii
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
@kisskiss-bangbang:
Glad you found it useful!
Since you're asking about the neck, I think the thickness is fine, especially since this is drawn in the style of manga (you could even make it thinner if you wanted to). Now, for the length, it's slightly long, but that's really all right too. The only thing I would suggest is try making the lines connecting her neck to her shoulders straighter and less of a gradual curve.
VivaLaParadise
Grand Otaku | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
Im glad that you are proud of your work :)
you did a really great job on the anatomy and the sketch is really neat. i could never pull that off! keep it up!
<3
kisskiss-bangbang
Otaku Eternal | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
@monochromexii:
Oh my oh my! That wassn't very long at all! Really it was just long enough to gather information from but without getting to sleepy. I swear.
Anyway- THanks for some advice about the hands. I need to work on them. But as a quick question (because I'm not sure this is right or not now that I look at it) Do you think the neck is a little long? Just wondering because it looks to long and to skinny.
Thank you for your help. It was very uh- helpful? I think you should stay on with your critiques. This one was fun to read. XP
Thanks again
matt
FUNimation
NOT THE COMPANY ;D (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
This looks very good! I like the pose and the hands look very nice~
I like what you're doing with the right hand, but at the same time, it doesn't look very natural. adding a hint of the thumb may help. :D
also the chin is a little too far to the right. Try centering it a bit more so it lines up with the rest of the face.
But overall, I think it looks wonderful! Adding a little more detail here and there will make it look even better. ^^ Like a little design on her apron or dress.
Keep up the great work!
kiksama
Otaku Legend | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
So cool, Matt-chan.
, You will draw manga, won't you?
Good luck.
I don't know too much about art... but I think the pose is good. Maybe you should change the face a little. The hair is good... Uh that's all
Last edited by kiksama at 6:55:50 AM EDT on May 31, 2010.
monochromexii
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/31/10 | Reply
Hello! I'm monochromexii~ I thought I'd help as well. I apologize beforehand for my ridiculously long critique...
You say you're not worried about the face, and I can see why- It's quite well done! The pose is too. This is a very pleasing and likable piece in general. (on a side note, I like the title too XD).There are only a few technical details here and there.
She's wearing a kimono underneath her apron, yes? disregard this if she is not ;_;
(a really unnecessary note, and very petty on my part, but good job on folding it left over right. Right over left is used for the dead).
Assuming it's a kimono, the sleeves should be larger, and as they are rolled up, the folds should be more plentiful and defined.
also, seeing as she is facing directly to the viewer, the kerchief on her head should arc evenly over her head and not be falling to her left. That would be more for a 3/4 view.
For her apron, I can see that she is bending towards her right, so you should draw more folds coming out of her right waist. You've got a start on the one that you've already drawn.
Now, you did her hands very well, albeit a little small. Also, the thumb on her left hand should be a bit shorter. Her palms need to be about as long as her index finger.
~~~
phew, okay, sorry about that! I know it's a lot of reading, but I hope I helped you a bit ._.
kisskiss-bangbang
Otaku Eternal | Posted 05/30/10 | Reply
@zero guardian:
Thank you zero-chan!!
Thanks so very much for the help. I will see to it that I practice drawing hands! Which i'm sure I should have done AGES ago!
XD
Anyway thanks again
matt
zero guardian
Otaku Eternal | Posted 05/30/10 | Reply
Saw you wanted some critique. Im Zero-chan, one of the mods from Critiquers United.
First, the pose is still one I have trouble with, and you did a great job!
her hands are really good, though a little bit off, try practicing hands.
I do think the shoulder closest to you is too far forward, just move it to the side and up a bit and it would look perfect.
Her face is really proportionate, which I applaud you for, I do think she needs a nose though.
Great job overall!
Zero-chan!