I think it's amazing. I've always wanted to start my own manga, and when I do, I hope it looks somewhat as good as yours. I know it's the first page, but I notice that there is more un-used space at the top. I think it would have been great if you crammed the boxes in a little more. With the extra space, you could fill it in with possibly an introduction, or some artist/author's notes. I hope I was able to help.