It's an awsome idea but it lacks detail and looks rather flat. Try to develop it more you you will have an awsome caracter on your hands. -Nods-

Hey! That's Really! good! I have some fan art my-self and your doing a rp with your friend? That's cool I'm "Kite" I'm going to sign your GB Keep up the good work. -^//^- Your friend, Kite