I like this one, (of course.... that might be because i'm a DBZ fanatic....), he's generally good, maybe stretched too thin, and the shading (like you said) is too heavy. use a lighter pencil, and press lighter maybe..... that's it

It really does suck, earase the shaded prts on the out side.

You spelled erase wrong, and that shadow part is my hand, I took the pic by web cam not scanner:)and I like it. You don't have to.