I got some help from Luna Lei on those japanese words. I didn`t know that Jin was a boy name, but it was such a nice name one her. And the name of the technique is supposed to mean "Eye of death". Well, I`m just a beginner. Thanks for the comment!!
For being 13 and claiming to be not very good with English, I'd say you have a spark of raw talent that just needs practice, so keep writing. The only things I'm lost on is: the technique: it translates to "it is of eye" - perhaps this is something significant to be revealed later? Okami just means "wolf", so I'm assuming its a wolf demon? And lastly, is her name pronounced "Jen" or "Gene"...if you were going for a Japanese name, "Jin" is pronounced "Gene" and its a boy's name. But its cool that girls have boy's names!
To be honest with you, I've seen a lot worse.I think if you keep working at it, you could be really, really good.
And I'm not trying to be mean, so don't take anything the wrong way.
darKatana
Otaku Legend | Posted 06/01/09 | Reply
@shadow lugia:
I have a little break :|
shadow lugia
Senior Otaku | Posted 06/01/09 | Reply
are you gona work on more?
Tatsumafangirl411
Grand Otaku | Posted 01/31/09 | Reply
Aww lolz I luv the chapter cover, its so cute!
Team Plasma N
Sinbad of Sindria (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 01/30/09 | Reply
This looks interesting, can't wait to see more!
Tatsumafangirl411
Grand Otaku | Posted 10/07/08 | Reply
Yay! U updated! Awesome
job! I LUV the story so
far!
Keep updating!
TheAngelRaine
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/07/08 | Reply
Why must you make me read so much!DX
Its really cute so far.^^
Rai-chan
darKatana
Otaku Legend | Posted 07/31/08 | Reply
@Kami-chan.x3:
*hug back* Thank you!
darKatana
Otaku Legend | Posted 07/31/08 | Reply
@Hatake Yoshimi:
I got some help from Luna Lei on those japanese words. I didn`t know that Jin was a boy name, but it was such a nice name one her. And the name of the technique is supposed to mean "Eye of death". Well, I`m just a beginner.
Thanks for the comment!!
Hatake Yoshimi
Otaku Legend | Posted 07/30/08 | Reply
For being 13 and claiming to be not very good with English, I'd say you have a spark of raw talent that just needs practice, so keep writing. The only things I'm lost on is: the technique: it translates to "it is of eye" - perhaps this is something significant to be revealed later? Okami just means "wolf", so I'm assuming its a wolf demon? And lastly, is her name pronounced "Jen" or "Gene"...if you were going for a Japanese name, "Jin" is pronounced "Gene" and its a boy's name. But its cool that girls have boy's names!
To be honest with you, I've seen a lot worse.I think if you keep working at it, you could be really, really good.
And I'm not trying to be mean, so don't take anything the wrong way.
Kami-chan.x3
Bubblegum'd! (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 07/30/08 | Reply
ITS COOL! I love this new cover. It's not lame, believe me. *huggles*
Tatsumafangirl411
Grand Otaku | Posted 07/30/08 | Reply
It so awesome so far!! Great work
!!!!!
kimokumori113
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/27/08 | Reply