On the Jazz! (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/27/11 | Reply
It looks promising so far. I won't repeat the anatomy thing, you're probably tired of hearing it lol. It is very hard to keep proportional. Typing out the written part, or at least enlarging some of it would help, it is kind of hard to see in a few places.
I think it's really neat that you are making your own manga period. Kudos to you! It takes a lot of work and I'm impressed with anyone who can put the effort in.
Ooo, the story looks promising! I'd suggest though for you to work on body porportions and not make the shoulder length so wide and the hips so skinny- especially on males.. And, I think it'll be better if you can make the text more clear, such as by typing it. There are some places where I can't read the words....
Interesting story, but like me you need to work a bit on your anatomy [well actually, I'm one to talk, i stink at drawing people... ^^">
I'm looking forward to the finished work!
Viollet
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/28/11 | Reply
I like the story. But like the others said, it's kinda hard to read the text.
Dark Phoenix
On the Jazz! (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/27/11 | Reply
It looks promising so far. I won't repeat the anatomy thing, you're probably tired of hearing it lol. It is very hard to keep proportional. Typing out the written part, or at least enlarging some of it would help, it is kind of hard to see in a few places.
I think it's really neat that you are making your own manga period. Kudos to you! It takes a lot of work and I'm impressed with anyone who can put the effort in.
Aria Sky
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/27/11 | Reply
Ooo, the story looks promising! I'd suggest though for you to work on body porportions and not make the shoulder length so wide and the hips so skinny- especially on males.. And, I think it'll be better if you can make the text more clear, such as by typing it. There are some places where I can't read the words....
clivedoveislegal
Otakuite | Posted 09/27/11 | Reply
Interesting story, but like me you need to work a bit on your anatomy [well actually, I'm one to talk, i stink at drawing people... ^^">
I'm looking forward to the finished work!
FUNKY STADIUM
Otakuite | Posted 09/27/11 | Reply
Way to go! I liked it. Where is page 6, 7, and 10?