Well written and different. I've tried to think of a rin and Sesshomaru story line for the past two months but it always sounded too over done. You hit it perfectly!
At first I thought the man was Inuyasha, but I was utterly mislead. Nice work, I love the idea! :D Your descriptive is wonderful, and Rin was kept in character; considering the timeline... following Sesshomaru with little question.
I don't know too much about the series, but this is a very interesting plot line. Your description is er... very descriptive and I love the way everything just... flows.
Great story, though! I enjoyed reading it very much. :]
Hm, personally I never pay attention to the mechanics, seeing as to how bad I am at them, but the story was very sweet, in the beging, until he said Rin, I thought this was about Kagome and Inuyasha, maybe it's because Seshomaru and Inuyasha and Rin and Kagome have simaler discreptions, very good, I wish there was more!-AsagiTaichou visit my site for a good fanfic
Sounds like a great story and an interesting plot! ^^ I really like your description and use of language :P I spotted some mistakes, for example typing to in stead of too :P Anyway, I think it's a great story and well written! I look forward to read more from you :3
FreshBlood
Otakuite++ | Posted 08/25/10 | Reply
at first i thought it was Kagome & inuyasha but Nice twist!
gaidek
Otakuite++ | Posted 09/18/09 | Reply
Well written and different. I've tried to think of a rin and Sesshomaru story line for the past two months but it always sounded too over done. You hit it perfectly!
JustAnEmoGurl13
Otakuite | Posted 06/25/09 | Reply
wow. i like it. nice writen.
SolemnSerpent
Cupcake Constable (Moderator) | Posted 01/25/09 | Reply
At first I thought the man was Inuyasha, but I was utterly mislead. Nice work, I love the idea! :D Your descriptive is wonderful, and Rin was kept in character; considering the timeline... following Sesshomaru with little question.
SinsofMidnight
A Diligent Sinner (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 12/07/08 | Reply
Hey!
Cute story line. I liked your use of detail. What inspired this, out of curiousity?
mewmewpudding
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/02/08 | Reply
I don't know too much about the series, but this is a very interesting plot line. Your description is er... very descriptive and I love the way everything just... flows.
Great story, though! I enjoyed reading it very much. :]
yasha girl
Otakuite+ | Posted 03/16/08 | Reply
i lov this story! i thought it was just some random girl instead of Rin, and i thought seshomaru was inuyasha. but i give this 9 of 10. (9.5)
AsagiTaichou
Senior Otaku | Posted 03/13/08 | Reply
Hm, personally I never pay attention to the mechanics, seeing as to how bad I am at them, but the story was very sweet, in the beging, until he said Rin, I thought this was about Kagome and Inuyasha, maybe it's because Seshomaru and Inuyasha and Rin and Kagome have simaler discreptions, very good, I wish there was more!-AsagiTaichou visit my site for a good fanfic
animebliss
Otakuite | Posted 03/07/08 | Reply
hey great story but work on spelling and grammar.other then that awsome story you should write more
just.me
DragonGirl (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 03/07/08 | Reply
Sounds like a great story and an interesting plot! ^^ I really like your description and use of language :P I spotted some mistakes, for example typing to in stead of too :P Anyway, I think it's a great story and well written! I look forward to read more from you :3