Indeed nice piece of writing ^_^ You've taken in account the characters really well. Vocab and behaviour... it all suits!
Maybe you should add a pun for Goku, that would be really nice (haven't read the next few pages yet, so don't kill me if you've already added one, hehe).
mimilove4
Otaku Legend | Posted 04/06/09 | Reply
@Nehszriah:
No, haha, of course I don't mind! ^_^
Nehszriah
Hits Self With Axe (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 04/05/09 | Reply
@mimilove4:
Your comments make me smile. Yay! :3
Mind if I PM you about something to do with the kids?
Be true, be you and of course, be otaku.
mimilove4
Otaku Legend | Posted 04/05/09 | Reply
Things are getting interesting, hehe... Faved it, so keep on writing ;P
mimilove4
Otaku Legend | Posted 04/05/09 | Reply
Lol, poor Gokudera...
Indeed nice piece of writing ^_^ You've taken in account the characters really well. Vocab and behaviour... it all suits!
Maybe you should add a pun for Goku, that would be really nice (haven't read the next few pages yet, so don't kill me if you've already added one, hehe).
Nehszriah
Hits Self With Axe (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 02/04/09 | Reply
@jannycats:
Thank you! ^__^ It was so hard to get people to review on fanfiction.net that I almost did not finish. =_=' I'm glad you liked it though.
Be true, be you and of course, be otaku.
jannycats
Otaku Legend | Posted 02/04/09 | Reply
Nice piece of writing, it really captures Gokudera's character ^_^