Very nice! Reminds me of the Death Note live action movie....Only better. Great disciptions and writing over all. I loved the allusion to the Bible (Huge Christian) cause I rewatched the actual episode the other day and thought of just that! It's great that you're taking a small interest in the liturature aspect of the Bible, even if you don't believe. ^.~
~Chero~

@jannycats:

Thanks man! *high fives*
-Ryu

I really don't like fanfiction, but this was really great! There's a nice balance between action and description, you just nailed it. And I love the final words, "the bells were silent" is really a poetic way to end a story. Endings are usually abrupt, but yours in just right. Loved it.

Good luck in the contest, I really hope you'll win. And great to find another atheist around here that knows about the Bible. *high fives*

@Ryu:

oh, oops. Atheist aren't really the type to read Bibles are they? I'm a Christian, so does that mean we can't be friends, I don't have to preach to you. I'm even friends with a person who's like a nothing, they've never even heard of a Bible.

@Kyubi Elric:

I'm atheist, lol. I just make sure I understand what I am against, as well as research symbolic scenes in storytelling.
-Ryu

I really liked this story!! I also like the fact that you put the similarity of the Bible with L washing his betrayer's feet, like Jesus did with Judas. You must be a good Christian.

@kisskiss-bangbang:

This was just for a fan word challenge. I'm sure I'll write more in the future, but another fanfic on Death Note isn't likely. I don't like fanfics that much, lol.
-Ryu

@kisskiss-bangbang:

Thank you very much.
-Ryu