Abundant Love (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/15/09 | Reply
The "for the future" bit is redundant because saving money automatically implies that it's for the future. It's impossible to save money "for the present" (not to be confused with saving money in the present) since money used in the present is being spent and no longer saved. So you can just drop that part entirely and your list doesn't have any inconsistencies anymore.
Edit:
Alternately, if you wanted to emphasize the "future" part, you could instead drop "money" since "saving for the future" usually implies saving money. Then rewrite the sentence as, "Our service can help you save time and save for the future."
Last edited by Desbreko at 10:55:06 PM EST on November 15, 2009.
I'm not sure how to word it, but it seems like the things listed don't really match. I see them as:
Save money.
Save time.
For the future. (wtf?)
You can save time and you can save money, but how do you save 'for the future'? That's always changing so you can't save it. I'm not sure if that's what you're looking for though. >_>
Desbreko
Abundant Love (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/15/09 | Reply
The "for the future" bit is redundant because saving money automatically implies that it's for the future. It's impossible to save money "for the present" (not to be confused with saving money in the present) since money used in the present is being spent and no longer saved. So you can just drop that part entirely and your list doesn't have any inconsistencies anymore.
Edit:
Alternately, if you wanted to emphasize the "future" part, you could instead drop "money" since "saving for the future" usually implies saving money. Then rewrite the sentence as, "Our service can help you save time and save for the future."
Last edited by Desbreko at 10:55:06 PM EST on November 15, 2009.
Kimmeh
The Beautiful German | Posted 11/13/09 | Reply
;-; *dislikes*
"This is Schweinsteiger fashion. ZIS IZ FASHUNN."
Sage of Magic
Moe Foxgirl (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
Can I just stab the sentence that made me cringe and erase it from my memory?
Miss Anonymous
Vagrant AI (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
The "and for the future" part sounds so off. I'm trying to think how I would rewrite it, but nothing's coming right now.
Kimmeh
The Beautiful German | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
AND WHAT...
"This is Schweinsteiger fashion. ZIS IZ FASHUNN."
SunfallE
Nyaa~ (ZE MEANIE) | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
I'm not sure how to word it, but it seems like the things listed don't really match. I see them as:
You can save time and you can save money, but how do you save 'for the future'? That's always changing so you can't save it. I'm not sure if that's what you're looking for though. >_>
In the name of the tune I will punish you!
Nehszriah
Hits Self With Axe (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/11/09 | Reply
I either would have written it this way:
...or something to that effect. >>' Then again, my self-taught ways tend to kick me in the butt.
Edit: Looking at my first choice written in the comment made me B(... so yeah.
Last edited by Nehszriah at 11:28:01 PM EST on November 11, 2009.
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