sometimes you have to get the boring stuff in even if it isn't grabbing sometimes because it's important, but i don't feel that you are losing people...as I said, just remember that people may not comment but still read! ^-^ OOHHH, fun, I love twists...I hearts them with my sinister grin of evilness! I am a master of the evil twists. Whether people know it or not 0,o MUWAHAHAHA.....ahem....
lol piggy lol jkjk i never had quail(sp)before i hope it was good and stuff awws a sweater,wow the only one to give a gift im surprissed at that normaly people WANT to get a gift just cause unless they aint got no money then i can understand,
ohh little big planet^^ i love that game altho i have is the jap and english demo had to play eng to read th rest of the text^^
so do you have online features then??
lol i dont think your writeing sounds plain and or rehearsed altho then again this could be before you share with us so idk lol yeah i hate creative block weather its lack of brain cells working at th moment or cant get in the mood lol
No I felt the same way and I´m going to start being more descriptive! Ack Sensie Ryu!!! Think I didnt recognise did you? Ha ha ha. Yes I re read my story and was like...okay girl you can stop being so...like this now, ha ha ha.
Well you know...how it is, ha ha ha. I dont know I think I need to spicen up my story somehow, I feel I am loosing the readers intrest, but I have got a plan! Mwuah ha ha ha ha, I am not going to tell you what it is, but hopefully you will notice in my second chapter, which! WHICH, will probably be long, ha ha ha.
LOL Really? My boyfriend actually says it alot as well, we rub off on each other alot.
Mm...baby chickens (now I'm hungry! lol Though that doesn't take much, I'm one for eating all the time lol)
My favorite chips...Hm...I think it would have to be a tie between BBQ and Salt and Vinegar, but honestly I haven't found a chip flavor that I haven't liked lol. ;)
Wash chairs? That somehow seems new to me... o_o
Little Big Planet... XD What an oxymoron...
I don't think your writing seems amateur. I like it. =)
And I told you he'd like the sweater. XD
Aww, glad he liked the sweater ^_^ lol it must've been a pretty big cake to feed a lot of people. Lol quail. Sounds different, but everything takes like chicken. Lol you're allowed to eat junk food when it's a party XP sorry you didn't feel so good afterwards. God, it sucks lol. I'm not a huge chip eater or big on a lot of junk food, but if there are doughnuts and coffee, y'all better clear the way! lmfao!
YUMMMMMMM. I really never worry about foods because I am pretty high metabolism and anything I eat doesnt affect me. So yay junk food. But yeah, birthdays are niceeeeeeee...
Abouut the writing, I really like your stlye but I think by now you should be drifitng into a more literal style, the prose is a bit more appropriate for prologues and poetry.
There's my constructive criticism.
Haha, the uni actually had cheesecake in the cafeteria tonight!! I was like, "Ooh, Someone Upstairs loves me!!" Then I tasted the cheesecake and was disappointed...The filling part tasted like some funky pudding, and the crust was regular pie crust, as opposed to the oh-so-yummy graham cracker crust!
;__; The caf disappoints me on a daily basis...
The Itsufer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Oh, it sounds like you had a lot of fun at your b-friends birthday^-^ I'm sure you had a wonderful time! And I bet he loved his sweater, you shouldn't worry about that. ^-^
You seemed to have tons of fun, except for not feeling well later on...that always sucks but at least you got a day to indulge before going back to healthy eatings!
Well, you updated so I will need to go and see what is there! I hope things keep flowing for you...I know I always hate it when I get blocked :P
Yes, exactly right, cute in a different way, ha ha ha. Its like they invented their own version of cute! JK! But yeah something similiar to that...ha ha ha.
I actually like that quote! I have never heard it and I like it! ha ha ha. Qwuail...or Quail? Bah! Bad spelling, ha ha ha ha. It did taste a lot like chicken, had a little more bones, and they were small. Like baby chickens! Or...teenage chickens, ha ha ha.
Chips! Ha ha ha. I dont know why but I was such a sucker for Cheese flavored ruffles, ha ha ha. What are your favorite chips?
yeah I was feeling so horrible I woke up in the middle of the night shaking like crazy, ugh it was horrible but hey I survived...thankfully and suprisingly, ha ha ha!
I know I am so glad he liked the sweater, big stress off my shoulders. ha ha ha.
I think we tend to eat more at parties because...well we know it's free, we know it's good, and most of all, we know there's lots!
Happy Birthday to him!!! :D and it's great that he liked your gift :P
hahaha, junk food huh? it happens to everyone :D at least you had fun at the party :D
Hey, awesome! The party sounded fun. Kudos on picking out the perfect sweater!
I want cake, now...And not the crap our uni's cafeteria tries to pass off as cake, either!! I want the sugar-loaded, lemon-flavor cake with the sugar-loaded confetti icing!! Mmm...
Yah, I'm a sucker for chips. I can withstand everything but chips...and ice cream. But quail sounds tasty, as my favorite saying goes "don't knock it until you try it" and that especially goes for food. I'm glad that you had fun at the party and your sweater was a hit! ^^
I haven't played that yet, but I agree that the sack people are cute, in a weird cute way...you know...you know...
itsumademo
The Itsufer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/22/09 | Reply
@AvariceTears:
sometimes you have to get the boring stuff in even if it isn't grabbing sometimes because it's important, but i don't feel that you are losing people...as I said, just remember that people may not comment but still read! ^-^ OOHHH, fun, I love twists...I hearts them with my sinister grin of evilness! I am a master of the evil twists. Whether people know it or not 0,o MUWAHAHAHA.....ahem....
sasuke uchia
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/22/09 | Reply
lol piggy lol jkjk i never had quail(sp)before i hope it was good and stuff awws a sweater,wow the only one to give a gift im surprissed at that normaly people WANT to get a gift just cause unless they aint got no money then i can understand,
ohh little big planet^^ i love that game altho i have is the jap and english demo had to play eng to read th rest of the text^^
so do you have online features then??
lol i dont think your writeing sounds plain and or rehearsed altho then again this could be before you share with us so idk lol yeah i hate creative block weather its lack of brain cells working at th moment or cant get in the mood lol
AvariceTears
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/22/09 | Reply
@Sensei Ryuu:
No I felt the same way and I´m going to start being more descriptive! Ack Sensie Ryu!!! Think I didnt recognise did you? Ha ha ha. Yes I re read my story and was like...okay girl you can stop being so...like this now, ha ha ha.
-Avarice-
AvariceTears
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/22/09 | Reply
@itsumademo:
Well you know...how it is, ha ha ha. I dont know I think I need to spicen up my story somehow, I feel I am loosing the readers intrest, but I have got a plan! Mwuah ha ha ha ha, I am not going to tell you what it is, but hopefully you will notice in my second chapter, which! WHICH, will probably be long, ha ha ha.
-Avarice-
littlemissharriet
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/22/09 | Reply
You helped picking out the cake?
That's so cool.
Looks like you really had a lot of fun and a lot of food.
I bet the food was delicious.
zero guardian
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@AvariceTears:
OMG! yes, I always eat WAY to much haha
haseo luver92
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@AvariceTears:
LOL Really? My boyfriend actually says it alot as well, we rub off on each other alot.
Mm...baby chickens (now I'm hungry! lol Though that doesn't take much, I'm one for eating all the time lol)
My favorite chips...Hm...I think it would have to be a tie between BBQ and Salt and Vinegar, but honestly I haven't found a chip flavor that I haven't liked lol. ;)
haseo
saekimidori
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Wash chairs? That somehow seems new to me... o_o
XD
Little Big Planet... XD What an oxymoron...
I don't think your writing seems amateur. I like it. =)
And I told you he'd like the sweater.
corn
I'm a veggie, dawg (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Aww, glad he liked the sweater ^_^ lol it must've been a pretty big cake to feed a lot of people. Lol quail. Sounds different, but everything takes like chicken. Lol you're allowed to eat junk food when it's a party XP sorry you didn't feel so good afterwards. God, it sucks lol. I'm not a huge chip eater or big on a lot of junk food, but if there are doughnuts and coffee, y'all better clear the way! lmfao!
Glad you had fun though ^_^
Sensei Ryuu
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
YUMMMMMMM. I really never worry about foods because I am pretty high metabolism and anything I eat doesnt affect me. So yay junk food. But yeah, birthdays are niceeeeeeee...
Abouut the writing, I really like your stlye but I think by now you should be drifitng into a more literal style, the prose is a bit more appropriate for prologues and poetry.
There's my constructive criticism.
<Pasqua>
Mercury Dragon
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@AvariceTears:
Haha, the uni actually had cheesecake in the cafeteria tonight!! I was like, "Ooh, Someone Upstairs loves me!!" Then I tasted the cheesecake and was disappointed...The filling part tasted like some funky pudding, and the crust was regular pie crust, as opposed to the oh-so-yummy graham cracker crust!
;__; The caf disappoints me on a daily basis...
itsumademo
The Itsufer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Oh, it sounds like you had a lot of fun at your b-friends birthday^-^ I'm sure you had a wonderful time! And I bet he loved his sweater, you shouldn't worry about that. ^-^
You seemed to have tons of fun, except for not feeling well later on...that always sucks but at least you got a day to indulge before going back to healthy eatings!
Well, you updated so I will need to go and see what is there! I hope things keep flowing for you...I know I always hate it when I get blocked :P
AvariceTears
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@Mercury Dragon:
I know me to, and I'm supposed to be eating healthy, wah!!
-Avarice-
Mercury Dragon
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@AvariceTears:
OMG, cake buddy!! Lemon's my favorite aside from cheesecake!!
O.O Great, now I want some....
AvariceTears
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@haseo luver92:
Yes, exactly right, cute in a different way, ha ha ha. Its like they invented their own version of cute! JK! But yeah something similiar to that...ha ha ha.
I actually like that quote! I have never heard it and I like it! ha ha ha. Qwuail...or Quail? Bah! Bad spelling, ha ha ha ha. It did taste a lot like chicken, had a little more bones, and they were small. Like baby chickens! Or...teenage chickens, ha ha ha.
Chips! Ha ha ha. I dont know why but I was such a sucker for Cheese flavored ruffles, ha ha ha. What are your favorite chips?
-Avarice-
AvariceTears
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@zero guardian:
yeah I was feeling so horrible I woke up in the middle of the night shaking like crazy, ugh it was horrible but hey I survived...thankfully and suprisingly, ha ha ha!
I know I am so glad he liked the sweater, big stress off my shoulders. ha ha ha.
I think we tend to eat more at parties because...well we know it's free, we know it's good, and most of all, we know there's lots!
-Avarice-
AvariceTears
Senior Otaku | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
@Mercury Dragon:
ha ha ha, MMMmMMmMMmmm I love lemon cake! It is like my favorite flavor of cake aside from cheese cake, ha ha ha!
How dare you tempt me so!
-Avarice-
xXWhitePhoenix
Otakuite++ | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Happy Birthday to him!!! :D and it's great that he liked your gift :P
hahaha, junk food huh? it happens to everyone :D at least you had fun at the party :D
Mercury Dragon
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Hey, awesome! The party sounded fun. Kudos on picking out the perfect sweater!
I want cake, now...And not the crap our uni's cafeteria tries to pass off as cake, either!! I want the sugar-loaded, lemon-flavor cake with the sugar-loaded confetti icing!! Mmm...
haseo luver92
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
Yah, I'm a sucker for chips. I can withstand everything but chips...and ice cream. But quail sounds tasty, as my favorite saying goes "don't knock it until you try it" and that especially goes for food. I'm glad that you had fun at the party and your sweater was a hit! ^^
I haven't played that yet, but I agree that the sack people are cute, in a weird cute way...you know...you know...
hope you have a great day!
haseo
zero guardian
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/21/09 | Reply
I hate it when I eat too much at a party too
I always feel horrible afterwards haha
at least he loved the sweater!