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"The Noblest King"

This is a short poem I wrote for a state poetry contest, and though I placed, I don't think it's my best work. I wrote it in a hurry, and the poem was led mainly by the rhymes I found, not by a particular story I wanted to tell. It was partly inspired by Arthurian legend (namely the BBC adaptation, Merlin). I was just wondering what your general thoughts on this piece were, and if you thought I could improve it somehow. Should I reconsider the rhyming format? Do the rhymes really fuel the piece? What about the pacing, line by line, stanza by stanza? Does it flow? Does it make sense? What do you personally get from this piece?

Thank you so much! I truly appreciate it. ^-^

~WyvernWings