You did mention what way it read- but I missed it the first time because I wassn't looking. *laughs* It was my bad!
You really did an amazing job mate don't get me wrong. Since it was asked that it be sketchy it looks okay for being sketchy. I would LOVE to see it coloured but you don't have to! :3
Thanks! More American than Japanese was what I was going for.
I'm not sure if I mentioned this, but it was for a storyboard contest which has to be done traditionally (aka pencil), so maybe that's why it looks like a draft. I'll have to see my comic again. They said they were gonna print it black/white so I didn't bother with color.
Havent heard of http://powernapcomic.com/, but will check it out. I should probably retouch it now using what you said.
I didn't say which way to read?! Sorry! I'll be sure to add it somewhere on the comic. No, you were helpful, thanks again!
I must admit it all looks prety good! The structure of the pannels looks really good and the flow and format are very easy on the eyes. The art looks REALLY good.
You have a pretty good style going on- with the people and how they move. Its very American instead of Japanese but I love it all the same. It would have been nice to see darker lines for the panel outlines, and clearer lineart for the people and even perhaps some colour but I understand that you where rushed.
If you where to go back and retouch it I would make the panel lines darker so they where easier to see. Its nicer on the eye. Also some wicked colouring like Power Nap and it would look amazing.
The format is AMAING though. Its not confusing at the least once you remember what way to read. The story is also really great.
I kinda rambled a bit, sorry. I hope that was what you where looking for; sorry I don't know much about cartoon/manga stuff.
kisskiss-bangbang
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/18/11 | Reply
@Allie Elric:
You did mention what way it read- but I missed it the first time because I wassn't looking. *laughs* It was my bad!
You really did an amazing job mate don't get me wrong. Since it was asked that it be sketchy it looks okay for being sketchy. I would LOVE to see it coloured but you don't have to! :3
matt
Allie Elric
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/18/11 | Reply
@kisskiss-bangbang:
Thanks! More American than Japanese was what I was going for.
I'm not sure if I mentioned this, but it was for a storyboard contest which has to be done traditionally (aka pencil), so maybe that's why it looks like a draft. I'll have to see my comic again. They said they were gonna print it black/white so I didn't bother with color.
Havent heard of http://powernapcomic.com/, but will check it out. I should probably retouch it now using what you said.
I didn't say which way to read?! Sorry! I'll be sure to add it somewhere on the comic. No, you were helpful, thanks again!
kisskiss-bangbang
Otaku Eternal | Posted 09/17/11 | Reply
I must admit it all looks prety good! The structure of the pannels looks really good and the flow and format are very easy on the eyes. The art looks REALLY good.
You have a pretty good style going on- with the people and how they move. Its very American instead of Japanese but I love it all the same. It would have been nice to see darker lines for the panel outlines, and clearer lineart for the people and even perhaps some colour but I understand that you where rushed.
If you where to go back and retouch it I would make the panel lines darker so they where easier to see. Its nicer on the eye. Also some wicked colouring like Power Nap and it would look amazing.
The format is AMAING though. Its not confusing at the least once you remember what way to read. The story is also really great.
I kinda rambled a bit, sorry. I hope that was what you where looking for; sorry I don't know much about cartoon/manga stuff.
matt