the grammar and language was suppose to be like that intentionally because that is how a lot of people talk in chicago. i wanted to do something different and not edit or water down the true content of my writing, so i left it as is ^_^
Dude did I ever mention this was raw? Awesome dude you know a lot of people write stories but yours is one I really do like I actually read it through. (Most folks I just skim it) Anyway awesome so far keep it up.
vampiergall
Otaku Eternal | Posted 01/21/10 | Reply
*cackles* This made my day! Or night? o.O?
I love it! Keep it up! ^-^
I like how your gangs thinks gray.
Helps us odd ones feel good about ourselves.
~Shadow
FrownzDontSmile
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/19/08 | Reply
@japan.freak:
the grammar and language was suppose to be like that intentionally because that is how a lot of people talk in chicago. i wanted to do something different and not edit or water down the true content of my writing, so i left it as is ^_^
and thanks (finally lol) for the comment
japan.freak
Grand Otaku | Posted 11/19/08 | Reply
Here it is. My much-promised comment!!!! *imaginary claps*
Good job, dude. The story looks real promising. However, the grammar needs a lil improvement.
The language was a little hard-to-read-and-understand, but that doesn't matter a whit. You've got a fine work here, my friend.
DeidaraNarutoClan
Hot and Cold (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 06/11/08 | Reply
Hope Chapter 5 comes out soon...
~Deidara
vampiergall
Otaku Eternal | Posted 06/09/08 | Reply
I like! I like! Get more on here, man!
mysterioushanyou
Otakuite++ | Posted 05/28/08 | Reply
awww a cliff hanger!? DAAAAAMN!
oh well
can't wait til Ch5! x3
i'm lovin' this!
keep up the good work, hun! x]
lator gator
+Kyra-
~who lives with a Nazi? i do! i do!**
lunastarz
Pokemon Master (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 05/25/08 | Reply
Ohhhh.....A showdown eh??? Cant wait until Chapter 5 to see what happens!
xaos
Burning Spirit (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 05/25/08 | Reply
Dude did I ever mention this was raw? Awesome dude you know a lot of people write stories but yours is one I really do like I actually read it through. (Most folks I just skim it) Anyway awesome so far keep it up.