Yea good idea! *thinking* Maybe we were friends (there I go talking about our characters in first person lolz) before you got turned to vamp and I got turned to shapeshifter cos' you wasn't born when I got turned ^_^ so maybe I got a contract to kill your parents because they did something and after some digging I found out they actually did so i took the contract. waddya think DN-chan?
Ok here goes my new commenting format.
i like the description in the first bit, it was really good.
I also like that you've managed to keep her insaneness, hehehe.
Though i think you needed to put a bit more thought behind her attacking the guy, it was very spontaneous and i think it would have been better if we got to see inside her head a bit.
Otherwise great job ^-^ going to read your next chapter now.
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Otakuite++ | Posted 11/08/09 | Reply
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she won't hurt or kill kiddies ^_^
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Otakuite++ | Posted 11/06/09 | Reply
@VWBSZWAS:
ok thanks. and this commenting thing that have is good. i can build on the things that you like, and work on things that you don't ^_^
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Otakuite++ | Posted 11/06/09 | Reply
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Yea good idea! *thinking* Maybe we were friends (there I go talking about our characters in first person lolz) before you got turned to vamp and I got turned to shapeshifter cos' you wasn't born when I got turned ^_^ so maybe I got a contract to kill your parents because they did something and after some digging I found out they actually did so i took the contract. waddya think DN-chan?
VWBSZWAS
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/06/09 | Reply
Ok here goes my new commenting format.
i like the description in the first bit, it was really good.
I also like that you've managed to keep her insaneness, hehehe.
Though i think you needed to put a bit more thought behind her attacking the guy, it was very spontaneous and i think it would have been better if we got to see inside her head a bit.
Otherwise great job ^-^ going to read your next chapter now.