i did give an explantion it was kinda hidden in there-Victoria changed her because she couldn't go on jobs and stuff and she felt responsible ect. I gave a whole paragraph on it
Great.
The only problem i have is that her character seemed to change dramaticaly, from the last chapter to this one, without much explanation.
Other that that it's good
thanks, cliffhangers give the other person something to work on and alawys keeps the readers wanting to keep reading to find out what happens ^_^ Oops 0__o i didn't notice the "told" thing 0__o
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/18/09 | Reply
@VWBSZWAS:
only when she's fighting or killing! and why don't we have this argument at school?
VWBSZWAS
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/17/09 | Reply
@EoAA:
It so is not, everything you've written on her gives her a totaly different personality.
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/17/09 | Reply
@VWBSZWAS:
only if you go by how she is when she is on a job, if you look at how she acts before that and after that, it is similar.
VWBSZWAS
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/16/09 | Reply
@EoAA:
Nope i still think she changed too much.
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/16/09 | Reply
@VWBSZWAS:
it's not totally different... she's only like that on jobs, when shes killing!
VWBSZWAS
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/15/09 | Reply
@EoAA:
A paragraph isn't enough if your going to turn someones personality tottaly different.
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/14/09 | Reply
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i love cliffhangers too, but not when the next book isn't already out. Cos' then i have to wait. I don't like waiting...
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/13/09 | Reply
@VWBSZWAS:
i did give an explantion it was kinda hidden in there-Victoria changed her because she couldn't go on jobs and stuff and she felt responsible ect. I gave a whole paragraph on it
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/13/09 | Reply
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Maria thinks that Kitty killed her parents
VWBSZWAS
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/13/09 | Reply
Great.
The only problem i have is that her character seemed to change dramaticaly, from the last chapter to this one, without much explanation.
Other that that it's good
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/13/09 | Reply
@:
thanks, cliffhangers give the other person something to work on and alawys keeps the readers wanting to keep reading to find out what happens ^_^ Oops 0__o i didn't notice the "told" thing 0__o
EoAA
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/13/09 | Reply
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*hugs back* Okay can't waitto see Maria's reaction ^_^