@AvariceTears:

Ok...thought it seemed a little off for the other guy's.

@Morbid Dollie:

oh yeah that's the prince's thoughts.

-Avarice-

@AvariceTears:

Chapter...2!

@Morbid Dollie:

wait...what chapter are you reading? ha ha.

-Avarice-

This is the prince's point of view?? His thoughts?

@Teapot Domescam:

yeah they are both different types of people and if I were to try to write it in the same tone than people would really get confused. The Prince isnt as confusing as Kapranova's way of thinking so it's probably why he is so blunt. He is after all recalling his past.

I am...guess you like it???

-Avarice-

I admit I was a little confused at first. I thought that Kapranova was telling the story and I was kind of frustrated with it because he was nice and then when you wrote in the beginning, he seemed more psycho, but then I read more and found out it was the prince and it all made a lot more sense lol. But yeah, it was interesting, but not as poetic as Kapranova's side of the story. kapranova is definitely more pyscho which makes it unique. The prince explains everything in simpler terms. I like Kapranoiva's side of the story better because it kets you go into his mind and I like that we could read his side of the story when you first started out because then we immediately knew what kind of guy he was.

XOXO

@:

Oh no! I get it now, I forgot you always refer to your characters as babies, ha ha ha. I normally call mine...creations, or my characters, ha ha ha. Yes, a formal title for such.

Ack! Annoying brothers are the worste! Mine woke me up this morning with his butt in my face. -__-

-Avarice-

@:

did you read the whole story?? or just the first page??

-Avarice-

@saekimidori:

told you i would! And besides it's the least i can do for you always commenting on my work.

-Avarice-

@AvariceTears:

It does. You did a great job. And thanks for reading and leaving feedback; I really appreciate it!

@saekimidori:

yes I read your first chapter as well...I left a guestbook signature for the comment, ha ha ha.

Thankyou for the compliment. I felt telling from both perspectives would help better understand the characters.

-Avarice-

Ah, I didn't see the pages at the bottom, now I do. I still don't think it was a long read, though.
I like it, I like how you changed to Reyles' point of view and gave the audience a background sorta thing (discussing a past event). It's quite good, really. Keep it up~

@saekimidori:

yes this is the guy Kapranova is jealous of, ha ha ha.
Glad you noticed!

-Avarice-

@AvariceTears:

Yeah, I actually stopped reading them too so when you posted the story here I was really excited XDD I was like ''I am going to read stories again~! yay!'' which suprised my sister when she was entering my room XDDD

Hai~!! I forgot to mention that!! :D you don't see that in most of the original stories over the net :D really, I love this story !! >.<

@saekimidori:

No you have to like click on the other pages below...it´s not my forum pages it´s the story pages.

Dont you see them on the bottom?

-Avarice-

Is this in the point of view of the dude that Mayotac is jealous(?) of? I wasn't sure. But I think it's a good intro. 8D

@AvariceTears:

Honestly, this only looks like 1 page to me.

@xXWhitePhoenix:

Oh I know exactly what kind of stories you mean...they get frustrating and normally I start to lose intrest in reading them and just stop readng it all together, ha ha ha.

I hope you like the idea that I am telling the story from both sides. Prince Reyels and Kapranova, ha ha ha.

-Avarice-

@saekimidori:

you dont think the seven pages are long!? Ack, I do! I hate long chapters...ha ha ha.

-Avarice-

Interesting~! :o I like his character, you gave gim divelopment, we can see how he reacts on things and stuff so I thinky you are an amazing writer. Most of stories I read, even though they had around 50 chapters there was no development. *looking forward to the next chap*

Hey, this isn't very long at all. o_O You lied. Lol.

(Still haven't read it yet. I'll comment again when I do.)

Your writing is so good!
I just love the way the story is going

wait...who are you reffering to?

-Avarice-