For my First Story

So my first story I kinda wanna tell you about my day from hell....
This took place 2 fridays ago, on the Friday 14th, imagine if it was friday 13th.
So my day had gone basically normally apart from the fact me and friends were so excited for the manga club after school! It was hilarious and all we did was fangirl the whole time!
So we left about 10 minutes after the club ended as I wanted to leave later anyway, my mum was going to be able to collect me until about 15 minutes later because she has to work alot cos were commoners.
So she was gonna be late anyway, but she ended up coming a half hour later!!
But I'll gat to that in a second, so while I was waiting I wanted to go for a walk around the cross country track, when I ran into a teacher and was about to back up when they called me over asking if Im about to go home and I said 'sure' so I had to walk out of the school around the wall, to the front gate to make sure the teacher leaves so I don't look crazy if I walk back in, so then they left and I went back to my original spot. (I know this is dragging a bit, I'll make it a bit more fast paced!). So my mum was late because of work and an over turned tractor in the middle of the crackn' motorway! So we had to go through the middle of nowhere and we didn't get back home till like 6;30. And then we had to get food, and were basically on a budget but anyway the stores card machine wasn't working and we had to put our money together which was £7. Then a really rude woman from my mumm's work called even though we were in the line, meant nothing to her. So after that we went to my grandmother's house to get my sister, whos a pain in the neck. Anyway she needed 2.50 to get into her youth club so we had to ask my Granmother to help us out but she only had one £20 note. So we left to go to a corner shop when my sister began acting like a flea and we all had an argument... and next thing you know the world's biggest funeral came by... Then the corner shop we went to cards didn't work either. So we had to go to another and thankfully we got change. And for the rest of the night me and my mum just tried to recover!
I know while I'm writing this now it dosen't sound as bad, but during that it was awful.
So I think this was OK for my first story maybe?