Sephi is cool and for you to put him in your own story of love and stuff is even cooler. i always wondered what would happen if he ever did fall in love. :D i wonder what his kids would look like if he had any O.o lolz.
YAY!! I'm glad u like it and thanks for the tips^^
As for the tenses, I'll try my best to find them and the spelling to correct them, but no promises.
Unforunatly I was never good with both of them and the PC is not much helping either =.= *sigh*
gaah.! Finally, a chance to escape ad make a visit xD
hah, but I need to hurry. Short time, sorry for that.
so, yea. Nice start.! It's drawing my attention in xD
But I noticed a few mistakes on tenses, which can cause confusion to other readers. And also, some words are not spelled correctly. (I noticed one. I'm not sure, but as far as I know, and when the teachers teach us, it's 'hung').^.^v
so yea. That's about it.. Continue on ^.^
I'll look forward to the next chapters! xD
~ayachan95
PS: if there was ever any wrong usage of words, or if any was mispelled, I'm sorry. I'm not actually using a PC. And the iPod just KEEPS on doing grammar checks, and keep on making me press the wrong button >.<
so there. I have to go, keep up the good work ^.^
Sara Jones
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/08/11 | Reply
Wow that was good
Rebirth of Soul
Otakuite++ | Posted 12/09/09 | Reply
@TelisaofLight:
Sephi is cool and for you to put him in your own story of love and stuff is even cooler. i always wondered what would happen if he ever did fall in love. :D i wonder what his kids would look like if he had any O.o lolz.
TelisaofLight
Grand Otaku | Posted 12/08/09 | Reply
@aYaCHaN95:
YAY!! I'm glad u like it and thanks for the tips^^
As for the tenses, I'll try my best to find them and the spelling to correct them, but no promises.
Unforunatly I was never good with both of them and the PC is not much helping either =.= *sigh*
aYaCHaN95
Otakuite++ | Posted 12/08/09 | Reply
gaah.! Finally, a chance to escape ad make a visit xD
hah, but I need to hurry. Short time, sorry for that.
so, yea. Nice start.! It's drawing my attention in xD
But I noticed a few mistakes on tenses, which can cause confusion to other readers. And also, some words are not spelled correctly. (I noticed one. I'm not sure, but as far as I know, and when the teachers teach us, it's 'hung').^.^v
so yea. That's about it.. Continue on ^.^
I'll look forward to the next chapters! xD
~ayachan95
PS: if there was ever any wrong usage of words, or if any was mispelled, I'm sorry. I'm not actually using a PC. And the iPod just KEEPS on doing grammar checks, and keep on making me press the wrong button >.<
so there. I have to go, keep up the good work ^.^