sorry,but describetion is improtant cuz it descibes the main character and is going to be used for others.so it minimizes the describetions of others and makes the story a little more creative...i am best at describeing characters!
It is good but the description is really long, it breaks all the action, cause the description is way too long, tho your writing is good and I like your style. No offense just constructive comment. Keep writing I love reading you.
Tatsushiro
Otakuite | Posted 12/26/10 | Reply
well thanx for commenting on the story again ichikaze!
ichikaze
Otakuite | Posted 12/25/10 | Reply
YEs very good, I love it
Tatsushiro
Otakuite | Posted 12/24/10 | Reply
sorry,but describetion is improtant cuz it descibes the main character and is going to be used for others.so it minimizes the describetions of others and makes the story a little more creative...i am best at describeing characters!
ichikaze
Otakuite | Posted 12/24/10 | Reply
It is good but the description is really long, it breaks all the action, cause the description is way too long, tho your writing is good and I like your style. No offense just constructive comment. Keep writing I love reading you.