Hey don't worry about the comment being long, it's really no problem ok? A long comment like this is better than a small "oh i like this" comment ya know ^^
I'm gonna try and fit some side characters into the story too. I just don't want to put them in for maybe a couple chapters and then forget about them. I gotz a short attention span xP
All shall be revealed soon in upcoming chapters. I just gotta hurry up and get to it! XD well I got the weekend to do it so it's all good.
What a great chapter to start off the story. a fight in school, showing his skills and Izume's shock. That was good.
Well, i know this is your story and you may write it as you please, but i hope there would be other side characters. maybe a male friend(he's like a senior prefect/students society or something) maybe even a teacher backing him up. Cause when he causes a commotion in school there's bound to be teachers around right?
Besides that, I think that Izume should gradually fall in love with Hirou rather than suddenly like him. Maybe at first pity and then she starts to like him and then love.
Aizawa is the bad character but i think you should instill some pride in him later in the story. like when lost a fight he keep his promises and so on.
And sooner or later you might want to reveal the true badguys in this story. Example (Yakuza,Mafia, Police, corrupt politicians, past enemies Etc.)
wow! Sorry about that long comment. hope you won't be mad at me! Sorry again.:
Umeda Isao
Otaku Legend | Posted 06/26/09 | Reply
Hey don't worry about the comment being long, it's really no problem ok?
A long comment like this is better than a small "oh i like this" comment ya know ^^
I'm gonna try and fit some side characters into the story too. I just don't want to put them in for maybe a couple chapters and then forget about them. I gotz a short attention span xP
All shall be revealed soon in upcoming chapters. I just gotta hurry up and get to it! XD well I got the weekend to do it so it's all good.
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Otakuite | Posted 06/26/09 | Reply
What a great chapter to start off the story. a fight in school, showing his skills and Izume's shock. That was good.
Well, i know this is your story and you may write it as you please, but i hope there would be other side characters. maybe a male friend(he's like a senior prefect/students society or something) maybe even a teacher backing him up. Cause when he causes a commotion in school there's bound to be teachers around right?
Besides that, I think that Izume should gradually fall in love with Hirou rather than suddenly like him. Maybe at first pity and then she starts to like him and then love.
Aizawa is the bad character but i think you should instill some pride in him later in the story. like when lost a fight he keep his promises and so on.
And sooner or later you might want to reveal the true badguys in this story. Example (Yakuza,Mafia, Police, corrupt politicians, past enemies Etc.)
wow! Sorry about that long comment. hope you won't be mad at me! Sorry again.: