Hmmmmm that a tough one....I think the best thing you'll get from me is I'll keep every thing crossed for ya!(Essays are not my thing. sorry i wish i could help more.)
Are you writing a persuasive essay? Comparative? Your main Idea is clearly stated but your ending line, 'It's my personal opinion, of course.' May cause a loss of strength behind your writing.
I don't really concern myself with politics, like you, so I do not much think about what would make a good government. I think if you need inspiration you should head out into your own country to find inspiration among your people there. Take the feelings of the people or the words in their songs and write them down as a collective thing. Perhaps a good government is one that listens to the people and maybe listening to the people yourself may help you to define such a illusive idea.
Anyway I am not the best at idea giving. Your sure to do fine without my help either way. Your off to a good start as it is.
My idea:
a good government is a government that is ready to tirelessly work for the welfare of the community. The government should know more about the things happening in the country. about the citizens. Abuses are everywhere and they're barely making a move.
Goku s girl
Senior Otaku | Posted 02/05/11 | Reply
Hmmmmm that a tough one....I think the best thing you'll get from me is I'll keep every thing crossed for ya!(Essays are not my thing. sorry i wish i could help more.)
josephine12cute
Otaku Legend | Posted 02/04/11 | Reply
@kisskiss-bangbang:
Thanks. Actually, I'm not into politics.... the essay just have to answer that question...
And lastly, the essay is more on personal insights and what you have in mind.
kisskiss-bangbang
Otaku Eternal | Posted 02/04/11 | Reply
Are you writing a persuasive essay? Comparative? Your main Idea is clearly stated but your ending line, 'It's my personal opinion, of course.' May cause a loss of strength behind your writing.
I don't really concern myself with politics, like you, so I do not much think about what would make a good government. I think if you need inspiration you should head out into your own country to find inspiration among your people there. Take the feelings of the people or the words in their songs and write them down as a collective thing. Perhaps a good government is one that listens to the people and maybe listening to the people yourself may help you to define such a illusive idea.
Anyway I am not the best at idea giving. Your sure to do fine without my help either way. Your off to a good start as it is.
matt
SarahPatricia
Otaku Legend | Posted 02/04/11 | Reply
Well, maybe you could find something here:
http://www.jobsdb.com.ph/PH/EN/StaticContentFullContainer/CampNet/Adspeak-2011/campaign.html Though you need an interpretation for 'em
My idea:
a good government is a government that is ready to tirelessly work for the welfare of the community. The government should know more about the things happening in the country. about the citizens. Abuses are everywhere and they're barely making a move.
I think it's kinda hanging though xD