i get watcha sayin
but...when i read poetry i pay alot of attention to the rhyme scheme
because too much rhyming always reminds me of early poetry...that one might write when young
it just ends up sounding strange
but it really is great
and ima listen to thatg song...like now.ish. ^.^
i wasnt really going for a particular rhyme scheme
it just kinda came out like that
if you listen to three days grace, check out their song never to late
theres a video for it you can find on youtube
the poem kinda matches the rythmn for the first verse and chorus
in the first stanza i think your missing a t for not and in the third a v for beleive and its a very good poem but the every-single-line-rhyming in the secound stanza kinda drives me crazy.
but aside from that
i really do like it.
its very good.
D:
lgxfuadxxx
Otakuite++ | Posted 10/17/08 | Reply
@The Shadow Prince:
i get watcha sayin
but...when i read poetry i pay alot of attention to the rhyme scheme
because too much rhyming always reminds me of early poetry...that one might write when young
it just ends up sounding strange
but it really is great
and ima listen to thatg song...like now.ish. ^.^
The Shadow Prince
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/17/08 | Reply
@lgxfuadxxx:
i wasnt really going for a particular rhyme scheme
it just kinda came out like that
if you listen to three days grace, check out their song never to late
theres a video for it you can find on youtube
the poem kinda matches the rythmn for the first verse and chorus
lgxfuadxxx
Otakuite++ | Posted 10/16/08 | Reply
in the first stanza i think your missing a t for not and in the third a v for beleive and its a very good poem but the every-single-line-rhyming in the secound stanza kinda drives me crazy.
but aside from that
i really do like it.
its very good.
D: