Thats right!!
I tottaly just wrote that on the fly in word pad!XD
Then when i took it into Microsoft Word.
And i figured out what was so wrong.
I was talking in IM talk.XD
Well i fixed all that.^^
Now i just have to get the characterzation down.^^
I just got done going over it so i hope you will read the improved one too.^^
thanks a lot!!!
Ive never really got into a serious roleplay so i have no idea what to expect with it.^^
It's good and your grammar aren't that bad. You just need to write more and tell how he felt and tell more about the cliff how did it look? Was ita high or low cliff?
TheAngelRaine
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/02/08 | Reply
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Thats right!!
I tottaly just wrote that on the fly in word pad!XD
Then when i took it into Microsoft Word.
And i figured out what was so wrong.
I was talking in IM talk.XD
Well i fixed all that.^^
Now i just have to get the characterzation down.^^
I just got done going over it so i hope you will read the improved one too.^^
thanks a lot!!!
Ive never really got into a serious roleplay so i have no idea what to expect with it.^^
TheAngelRaine
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/02/08 | Reply
@darKatana:
i dont really know if i have to right more...cuz people got in on less writing. oo...
darKatana
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/02/08 | Reply
It's good and your grammar aren't that bad. You just need to write more and tell how he felt and tell more about the cliff how did it look? Was ita high or low cliff?