Yeah, I though the first attempt was a bit to informal. And after reading up on Japanese culture and watching a Japanese vlog and getting ready to do a school report on Geisha I concluded that it was WAY to informal the first time. So I learned some new things. XD
Haha yes, She reminds me of Yumi as well! Haha. I'm not sure how that came up be but Yumi experimentally snuck herself into Chiaki somehow. Lol. Yes, I cried at that scene and my mom thought I was pathetic. LOL. I'm gunna try and cosplay as Yumi next year. ^^
KK! Read slow because the next chapters wont be here untill novembers over because I have been doing NanoWrimo (Which is the huge writing event where you have to write a 50,000 word novel through november 1-30th.) So I have been busy writing my original novel! XD
I finally finished reading this chapter! Sorry for keeping you on the wait!
I noticed the improvements, I think it's better now, with Sojiro and Chiaki being more formal toward one another.
It's not only Sojiro; Chiaki reminds me of Yumi too, LOL. God, I love that character... The way she died for Shishio. That scene was touching.
I'll read the next chapters as soon as possible! Keep up the good work!
Well it's a random fanfic. It's supposed to include three dif anime, I have five in it already. Ouran, Bleach, Tsubasa, xxxHolic, and Inuyasha. ROFLMAO!!! I'll be posting it soon. Just need to write up the ending. :)
Yeah, I read it over yesterday and each time I saw something I was like "ohh.. ." or when I got to the money point. XD Its supposed to be 20,000 yin! XD
No you aren't slow...I just recently discovered I have lost the ability to write short stories. I attempted a short fanfic...and it's already 14 pages....*shakes head* I'm so bad. I just hope it comes out good. -_-;
hehe I understand. No problem. XD Just thought I should tell you is all. hehehe
Lol! That's awesome. yeah I know, I need to edit. I was just like "ITS DONE, MUST POST!" lol. cause it took so long an i dunno why. ^^;
730! WHOO! thats allot. Most I have written for one story is 100. ^^; I feel slow.
LOL!!!! I love how she giggles with her hand over her mouth. I totally got a visual there! XD
Ooooh poor you! I would totally edit this if I had a little more time!! T.T Maybe I still will...but I'm not promising anything. You should go over it yourself to practice editing. LOLz. I've had to edit my book 3 times already...@___@ It can be hard...when you have to go through 730 pages! Good news is...I always enjoy it. So at least I hope it's entertaining! X3
Aww Drat. >.< Darn Spelling and Math! Why must you torture me so! XD
Thanks though, I'll fix that when I can.
And thank you! I'm really happy with it, the first one I was like, "There is no culture in this what so ever!" lol. And I wanted Chiaki to be more secret where she can hide most of what shes thinking instead of almost peeing her pants because; "OMG ITS THE TENKEN!" XD.
I think that was even better!! You added alot more culture to it!!
Now, I found some spelling errors, and the prices didn't match up. It's pretty much just basic stuff you'll have to correct when you go over it again. Other than that, I was quite happy with the plot you're setting up again! X3 I love how descriptive you are, like I can clearly see her kimono.
Creme Of Rolo
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 11/09/09 | Reply
@Sole Storyteller:
Yay! Glad you liked it. I worked hard. ^^
Yeah, I though the first attempt was a bit to informal. And after reading up on Japanese culture and watching a Japanese vlog and getting ready to do a school report on Geisha I concluded that it was WAY to informal the first time. So I learned some new things. XD
Haha yes, She reminds me of Yumi as well! Haha. I'm not sure how that came up be but Yumi experimentally snuck herself into Chiaki somehow. Lol. Yes, I cried at that scene and my mom thought I was pathetic. LOL. I'm gunna try and cosplay as Yumi next year. ^^
KK! Read slow because the next chapters wont be here untill novembers over because I have been doing NanoWrimo (Which is the huge writing event where you have to write a 50,000 word novel through november 1-30th.) So I have been busy writing my original novel! XD
Thanks for the comment/read!
Sole Storyteller
Otaku Legend | Posted 11/09/09 | Reply
I finally finished reading this chapter! Sorry for keeping you on the wait!
I noticed the improvements, I think it's better now, with Sojiro and Chiaki being more formal toward one another.
It's not only Sojiro; Chiaki reminds me of Yumi too, LOL. God, I love that character... The way she died for Shishio. That scene was touching.
I'll read the next chapters as soon as possible! Keep up the good work!
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Sleeping Dragon (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/15/09 | Reply
@Creme Of Rolo:
LOL Yup. X3
Well it's a random fanfic. It's supposed to include three dif anime, I have five in it already. Ouran, Bleach, Tsubasa, xxxHolic, and Inuyasha. ROFLMAO!!! I'll be posting it soon. Just need to write up the ending. :)
Creme Of Rolo
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 10/15/09 | Reply
@Support KIRA:
OOOO fanfic of what. ^^;
Yeah, I read it over yesterday and each time I saw something I was like "ohh.. ." or when I got to the money point. XD Its supposed to be 20,000 yin! XD
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Sleeping Dragon (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/14/09 | Reply
@Creme Of Rolo:
No you aren't slow...I just recently discovered I have lost the ability to write short stories. I attempted a short fanfic...and it's already 14 pages....*shakes head* I'm so bad. I just hope it comes out good. -_-;
hehe I understand. No problem. XD Just thought I should tell you is all. hehehe
Creme Of Rolo
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 10/14/09 | Reply
@Support KIRA:
Aw, thanks. ^^
Lol! That's awesome. yeah I know, I need to edit. I was just like "ITS DONE, MUST POST!" lol. cause it took so long an i dunno why. ^^;
730! WHOO! thats allot. Most I have written for one story is 100. ^^; I feel slow.
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Sleeping Dragon (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/14/09 | Reply
@Creme Of Rolo:
LOL!!!! I love how she giggles with her hand over her mouth. I totally got a visual there! XD
Ooooh poor you! I would totally edit this if I had a little more time!! T.T Maybe I still will...but I'm not promising anything. You should go over it yourself to practice editing. LOLz. I've had to edit my book 3 times already...@___@ It can be hard...when you have to go through 730 pages! Good news is...I always enjoy it. So at least I hope it's entertaining! X3
Creme Of Rolo
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 10/14/09 | Reply
@Support KIRA:
Aww Drat. >.< Darn Spelling and Math! Why must you torture me so! XD
Thanks though, I'll fix that when I can.
And thank you! I'm really happy with it, the first one I was like, "There is no culture in this what so ever!" lol. And I wanted Chiaki to be more secret where she can hide most of what shes thinking instead of almost peeing her pants because; "OMG ITS THE TENKEN!" XD.
Anyway. Thanks for reading and commenting! *hugs*
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Sleeping Dragon (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/14/09 | Reply
I think that was even better!! You added alot more culture to it!!
Now, I found some spelling errors, and the prices didn't match up. It's pretty much just basic stuff you'll have to correct when you go over it again. Other than that, I was quite happy with the plot you're setting up again! X3 I love how descriptive you are, like I can clearly see her kimono.
Keep it up!!! >X3
SojiRem
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/13/09 | Reply
@Creme Of Rolo:
>;3 and yes I will.
Creme Of Rolo
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 10/13/09 | Reply
@SojiRem:
Haha, yes.
OOOOO, yes you should. :D And me also for you.
SojiRem
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/13/09 | Reply
;A; ah our dearest love
<.< I need to make you a wallie of him some day
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