Haha yea I got carried away. ^^;;
Yup! That was the intention. Haha.
Kk, take your time. My computer crashed so I wont be writing for this story in a LONG TIME.
Wow, that's completely different from the first version! LOL
I liked the fight... I can totally see Soujiro doing that, just avoiding her sword, much like Kenshin would do. And the surprise stabbing in the end... Poor Soujiro! XD
I'll read the next chapter as soon as I have more time! ^^
YOSH!! So I finally get to read this when I can comment on it!! *laughs*
When you said total re-vamp...you MEANT IT!! This is so different!! It's...awesome! I love how Hakuchi just saw right through her like that. And also how Soji was playin with her in the battle. It's so cold...how she stabs him like that... T.T Poor Seta-kun.
Alright.Spelling errors, and very few grammar errors. Other than that, seems that the plot is flowing quite nicely. XD
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Otaku Legend | Posted 11/29/09 | Reply
@Creme Of Rolo:
LOL, I know what you mean... I've been working again in a story I wrote aroundo 2005/2006, and I'm feeling the urge to rewrite WHOLE chapters!
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Senior Otaku+ | Posted 11/29/09 | Reply
@Sole Storyteller:
Haha yea I got carried away. ^^;;
Yup! That was the intention. Haha.
Kk, take your time. My computer crashed so I wont be writing for this story in a LONG TIME.
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Otaku Legend | Posted 11/29/09 | Reply
Wow, that's completely different from the first version! LOL
I liked the fight... I can totally see Soujiro doing that, just avoiding her sword, much like Kenshin would do. And the surprise stabbing in the end... Poor Soujiro! XD
I'll read the next chapter as soon as I have more time! ^^
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Sleeping Dragon (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
@Creme Of Rolo:
Oh yeah, she's so cool. A little girl...surrrrrrre. *laughs*
Creme Of Rolo
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
@Support KIRA:
Ah~ sank you! Yes, yes, Very cold. >.> And I think Hakuchi is one of my new favorites! XD
Ah ah yes, I need to edit! *esplodes*
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Sleeping Dragon (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 11/12/09 | Reply
YOSH!! So I finally get to read this when I can comment on it!! *laughs*
When you said total re-vamp...you MEANT IT!! This is so different!! It's...awesome! I love how Hakuchi just saw right through her like that. And also how Soji was playin with her in the battle. It's so cold...how she stabs him like that... T.T Poor Seta-kun.
Alright.Spelling errors, and very few grammar errors. Other than that, seems that the plot is flowing quite nicely. XD