@Afterglow:

He's supposed to. xD
Yeah. Weird right? It's RIGHT THERE, IN FRONT OF YOU.
...
But it won't really matter if you read it now because I haven't really started on chapter 2.

Alcott has an attitude. The little jerk. Haha.
I can't believe I haven't read this before. And your little book... it's right infront of me at this very moment. I should just pick it up and read it right now...
But I won't. Haha.

@moonlit dream:

Hehe, yes, I completely understand you. And I was just telling you to show you that you're actually pretty formal with yours. Mine is just the simple person talks, then does an action. For example:

Kiyoshi: Hello, my name is Kiyoshi.

Kiyoshi bows.

That or I just have dialogue and no action, I'd like to think about it later.

It's just interesting how you write yours. It's so very similar to the way I learned in class, because it seems so complex. And just in case you wanted to know how screenplays are written, thar ya go! XD

@:

Probably not. ;~; But maybe. xD;;
I think I want to wait until I'm better at drawing people at different angles...
Yes, Alcott is the main character. xD; Luli and Ms. Marigold are main characters as well, but the story is centralized around Alcott.

@Wakusei Aoshi:

xD;; I'm doing it this way mostly mostly mostly just so I can get the dialouge down. I'll be focusing more on things like camera angles and actions when I do a paneling draft later, which is why I was very brief with the actions. The brief actions also allow me to put it into comic form; I can see it panel-for-panel better with the dialouge this way. If I get too in-debth with the actions/ect, they'll outshine the dialouge.
Example:

Alcott: No! <stands up> How can you not understand, Mother?! (I can put one panel of him saying "no" and standing up, and the next one will have him saying the rest of the dialouge.)

Alcott: No!

Alcott stands up, furious with his mother.

Alcott: How can you not understand, Mother?!

(You may not notice it because you're not the one who sees the comic in their head, but the dialouge feels more disconnected, as if the panels wouldn't flow. It feels more like a novel, rather than a comic book.)

Also, I used the "<>"s so I could easily destinguish between dialouge and non-dialouge. I'm going to revise the dialoug at some point, and it'd be easier to do that if I could focus on the words instead of the actions.

So, as you can see, I used the "<>"s for a reason. :>
But thank you for your concern!

Hrmm...interesting...

*in intellectual pose* I see...Your way of organizing this is intriguing.

Y'see I took a class on these kinds of things, scripts I mean, and your way of doing things is pretty similar, except, well, like a picture it's not contrasting enough. Something I shouldn't be critiquing, but I am (because that's the way I am! XD). You use too many '<' and '>', instead you should use italics, spaces, and complete sentences for actions.

So if one person was saying something and then they would do the action, you would put whatever they say and then the action. Then when there is a scene change you would say the time and place instead of putting that into a sentence. Like so:

Kitchen - Day

Melanie picks up a knife.

Melanie: I wish it were sharper so I could cut things better.

Melanie pushes the knife onto her hand, cutting it. Blood begins to leak from her hand.

CLOSE UP: Bleeding palm.

Like that....even though that's completely random! XD

Just thought I'd let you know if you'd like it to be easier. But I prefer doing it the even easier way where you just say in different spaces what they're doing and what they're saying. Like them saying something, then the action, and then on and on like that.

Sorry, I'm just rambling now! ^ ^;