@Shishou:

Oh. Thank you; I haven't looked at this in a while, and those tiny things can ruin a piece sometimes.

I dunno if you have already seen this mistake yet, but, you put "Here eyes were all faded-green..." instead of "Her eyes..." Sorry to bother you. ^ ^;;

That's really cool. I like how they could change forms.

~Sarah

I wish I could give you a good critique, but alas, I fail at writing. =/
I did like it, and I want more. NAOPLZ x3
That is about all I have on this end. Sorry. ^ ^;;

Really, really good.

I could see the scenes in my mind you wrote it so vividly.

^_^

I think you hit the animal influence on their personalities quite well. The Panther seems playful and confident, very cat-like, but it's not too much of those aspects so as to be overbearing. And Drannet's calm observational nature fits that of a Hawk quite nicely. (I like that character, btw. ^.^)

Now, what I'd like to know is do the characters I used there feel like they have a touch of animal to them? I don't want to play the concept too heavy, but I do at least want to feel like something of their other half carries over.

@TwistedCyberChick:

Excellent, thanks.

@Allamorph:

Bottom of page 1: "From the waist down the man appeared as any other hunter, wearing long, think-spun pants" (thick?)

Top of page 2: "She cocked her head to once side."

1/3 way down page 2: "“Mm-hmm!” The woman shifter her weight to her left leg"

See? Three of them. ^-^

@TwistedCyberChick:

Spelling errors? Where?

*rereads*

I see. This kind of sketch. heh heh ^_^'

This was a really nice read, Alla. I saw like, maybe three spelling errors, but nothing else that would want revising. Your descriptions are precise, yet eloquent. Very nice. The moment were Drannet switches into a man and starts plummeting was surprisingly exhilarating. It was very easy to envision the scene in my mind. I'm excited to see this creation being shared with us. Thank you. ^.^

To be frank, I cannot find any sort of thing to point at and whine about at this point in time. This was a nice little narrative scene which definitely leaves me wanting to read more...

...and I agree those eyes are freaky as hell. O_o

Oh, and I think it is a wise decision to make the world's language pretty close to English. It would save both you and the reader a ton of translation troubles.